Sunday, August 14, 2011

Free



This post is a 55 fiction  - 55 Fiction is a form of micro-fiction that refers to the works of fiction limited to a maximum of fifty-five words


Amit saw his name in the facebook "friend suggestions"
"Shall I call him?"
"What will he think?"
"Will he even talk to me?"
"Would I look smaller?"
"It wasn't entirely my fault"


"What the hell"


He picked up the phone and dialled
"Dude, I am sorry!"


And just like that, he was free.


31 comments:

aativas said...

A 'small' action brings so much of Freedom!

Anonymous said...

beautiful...well said

Someone is Special said...

Just 55 words Freedom.. Nice one VP... Good luck for Blog-a-Ton. Free... are we?

Someone is Special

astrosunilnomy said...

free from guilt, nice one, when one forgives, the other person feels free....good idea ! could have been more of an article, 55 word fiction has less to offer to a serious reader !

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Prashant Mehta said...

We all make mistakes. Apologizing for them makes us truly "free" of our guild

binzy said...

Awesome laconic 55 words !! Forgetting and forgiving really sets you free !!

CRD said...

I guess that sets him free from guilt

Nice post. All the best for the contest :)

Cheers
CRD

Here's my entry
Them Slaves

Vikram Pyati said...

@aativas Thats true. Thanks for stopping by.

@SIS Thanks for the appreciation

@Sunil Yes, I agree that 55 word is sometimes too short, but I guess that is the challenge !

Vikram Pyati said...

@Prashanth Yes, accepting that we were at fault sometimes takes a lot of courage. Thanks for stopping by.

@binzy Thanks for the appreciation

@CRD Thanks for the comments

sowmya said...

very true ..one becomes free when he feel for it :)

nice post
all the best
keep smiling always :)

The Fool said...

Nice one. You seem to have the knack of aptly capturing the common mental turmoils that we undergo. Of course last time you had greater number of words to do justice. Must have been much more challenging doing the same in fewer words this time. But you have pretty well.

You can check out my Blog-a-ton entry here - In search of freedom

Sadiya Merchant said...

dats actually a very realistic take.
evrytime i drop by ur blog *wich i admit is only at blogatons*, a very strikin feature is d genuinity of wat ur sayin. seriously, its sumthin i remembr takin note of b4 as well! :)

D2 said...

Aah, emotional freedom. It can be such a relief. Nice take on that.
All the best for BAT.

Aashish Sood said...

Very well capture mental struggle... maafi mangne se koi chhota nhn hota :D

ATB for BAT

Do check out my entry at Free? To do what exactly?

Regards
Wandering Thoughts

Ketan said...

Today i am going 2 call some one..

Hema Nimbekar said...

Nice One...Sometimes our small actions give us freedom from mind thoughts/questions and guilt..

Like forgiveness can free us from anger and thought of revenge..

Here is my entry
आजाद है हम

nidhi said...

wow...i mean just with 55 words you conveyed such an important message that the tree which bends only bears fruits.. FREE
good luch fot BAT :)

Vikram Pyati said...

@Soumya Thanks:)

@The Fool Thanks for the appreciation :)

@Sadiya Thanks for the encouraging comments :)

Vikram Pyati said...

@D2, @Aashish - Thanks for the appreciation

@Ketan - Glad that 55 words can have such an effect :)

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Vikram Pyati said...

@Hema @Nidhi - Thanks for the reading and appreciating :)

Animesh Ganguly said...

ohh, that was concise and pretty nice. Freeing yourself from the guilt by yourself taking the initiative.
Good one Vikram.

What Being Free meant for her

Brijender Singh said...

Profound, poignant and bang on target!
You have exemplified the maxim that as difficult as it is to stand up to our enemies, it is harder still to stand up to our friends.
And the brevity of your expression, combined with the innocence of the thought, leave no scope for ambiguity.
GREAT piece of writing.

the critics said...

simple and cute i wud stay...why keeping it throw it out right ?? :):)


here is mine
The search for eternal freedom – A Dragonfly’s curse

the critics said...

Thanks dude for your comment . . but that's not the post i wrote for blog a ton its something i wrote for myself . . . its my bad that i posted my blog link here instead of the post link . . . anyways cheers dude . . happy writing . . . :-))

pri said...

sometimes an apology is more therapeutic to the one who says it than the one whom it is said to...

this 55-fiction spoke out a very strong reality which we often overlook! :)

all the best for BAT!

you can read my entry here---
FREE

cheers! :)

Vikram Pyati said...

@Animesh Thank you :)

@Brijender Thanks. Your comment made my day :)

@Critics Thanks :)

@Pri Thats true... sometimes we need to accept the mistake and apologize. Thanks for apperciating :)

Richi Baidwan said...

Everyone before me has said in bits and pieces and some in entirety exactly what I wanted to say it but I'll mention it nonetheless.

Misunderstandings are bound to happens, especially with people who are truly our own. We, as you've so eloquently put in the 55 words, must reach out.

Vikram Pyati said...

@Richi True. Thanks for reading :)

Sidra Sayeed said...

Thought you might like this: http://sidrasayeed.blogspot.com/2011/09/chilly-chow-yo.html